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Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by RayCaptain, Oct 30, 2010.

  1. RayCaptain

    RayCaptain 如朱

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    His blood was spilled at the whim of the blind,
    All He ever was, was a hero and kind,
    3 nails, 2 thieves, and 1 tree,
    Was all it took to make them see...

    The ground quaked as did their shaking legs,
    The vail was torn and we were taken down a few pegs,
    Who knew red could erase stains?
    To wash over us and heal our pains...

    I swear this anger is made of lies,
    The same ones that darkne my skies,
    But through those clouds of gray,
    Will come a brilliant light to save the day...

    When the cold tears into your heart,
    He will be the warmth that never shall depart,
    A breath of life into your soul,
    The living water will make you whole...

    There is a void that must be filled,
    A plan that is yet to be revealed,
    But I drop to my knees and close my eyes,
    And look towards those eastern skies...

    The King is coming and I have to let go,
    Of all the false idols, of everything I know,
    Call it blind faith, but I've got a feeling,
    That one day there will be no more killing...

    Or pain at all, to tell the truth,
    And we can all feel it, all the youth,
    Like a gentle breeze,
    It puts us at ease...

    Now I wait,
    No more debate,
    Finished driving the last nail,
    Time to storm the gates of Hell...
     
  2. wanderingmagus

    wanderingmagus Constantly Around :D

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    awesome poetry!! i can't rhyme.. you're doing great!!
     
  3. Running Wolf

    Running Wolf Join the Madness

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    good ones, very nice and rythmic =)
    Good job
     
  4. The peoples champion

    The peoples champion The peoples champion

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    Excellent story and your attention to detail with in each story is getting better every time you write.




     
  5. Rivals

    Rivals The Game.

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    Really Good :)