What impression would this synopsis make on you?

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  1. AA Institute

    AA Institute New Member

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    Hi,

    I would be grateful for some feedback as to what impression this synopsis would make on you, if you saw it on the back of a sci-fi fantasy novel:-

    It's been two years since the Centauri Princess was plagued by a series of terror attacks from mysterious winged, wolf-like creatures arriving in from the interstellar night. Having eliminated their threat, the lonely ark was once again cruising on her silent voyage towards a near-infinitely far destination, still tens of thousands of years in the future. In midst of this sereneness, what could possibly go wrong?
    In the immense ocean of darkness stretching out beyond our solar system, a mining expedition is despatched onto the surface of an ice world found drifting in the Oort cloud to replenish the ark ship's uranium reserves. There, it encounters mysterious revelations inside a 'city of lights'... The discovery is of something seductively beautiful, yet viciously deadly. At the same time, it offers a solution that proves priceless to a multi-generational colony crew eager to reach its unreachable destination in one single generation. In the end, a deadly struggle ensues amongst the ark's own crew in the quest for immortality...

    Thanks for any comment (however harsh/critical)

    :)

    AA
     
  2. Elkean

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    It was good AA Institute. I enjoyed it and it sounded very original. You should post more of it.
     
  3. AA Institute

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    Hi,
    Thanks very much for your kind comments, I will keep to that synopsis.

    But now I have to choose a "PREFACE" out of two possible choices:-

    <SNIP> (Edited out)

    I have kept to the second preface...

    Thanks again. :)

    AA
     
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  4. Vanaiel

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    Well, first of all I think that you should leave the 'This is the second book...' out of it, or at least state that as the very first and make a huge gap down to the preface itself. Simply because I feel that it rips you out of the story, especially if it is put last.
    As to which preface I prefer, I must choose number two, because I find it more novel-like and less like a science report, which the first one leans against with all the long descriptions.
    I think, though, that this has something to do with the language itself. My mother tounge isn't English, so despite me being able to write and speak the language proberly, I might not be able to grasp the long intricate sentences in same way as a 'native' would ;o) My advice is, that if you want the book to be for the broad pubplic and not only the book-worms, you should write less descriptive (not meaning that you should leave it out, just that there ought to happen something in-between the descriptions) and with varying sentence lenghts.

    By the way, sorry if I'm harsh on you, but it was what came to mind.
    ~ Vanaiel ~
     
  5. Black Tattoo

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    It grabbed my attention and made me want to read more. Since this is the whole point of a synopsis - I think you've done an excellent job! :D
     
  6. Soteria

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    That was a great synopsis. I would love to read a chapter of the book.
     
  7. AA Institute

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    Sorry folks, been away writing for a while :) very busily polishing up the manuscript!

    Best wishes,

    AA
     
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  8. Black Tattoo

    Black Tattoo The Corruptor

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    Checked 'em out....VERY COOL! You write very well, AA....have you ever been published?
     
  9. AA Institute

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  10. BBallForLife

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    Great synopsis.
     
  11. Borael

    Borael Prophet of Arka

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    good synopsis!