What do you think?

Discussion in 'Reviews' started by Obsidian, Dec 19, 2013.

  1. Obsidian

    Obsidian Scribe of Cayol

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    Hi everyone! I'm new here, and I want to see what you think of a fantasy story I've been working on. Just for reference, Cayol is the country where basically all humans in the world have been sort of trapped. This is just the first paragraph.

    Thanks!
     
  2. GrimWarlock

    GrimWarlock Daemon Prince of Tzeentch

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    Well... Actually I don't think anything. I need more before I can review. This could be a good start but just as easily it can be a bad one, when without context. So.... If you feel like it, give a bit more, as to create a feel for what you're getting at
     
  3. andy.peloquin

    andy.peloquin Andy Peloquin

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    It looks interesting, but like GrimWarlock says, we need a bit more.