Truthseeker

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Dystopia Eternal, Apr 5, 2004.

  1. Dystopia Eternal

    Dystopia Eternal The Windbringer

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    I am a lost man wandering
    Ne’er with a care
    I am on my path
    Going anyplace I dare.

    I am on my path,
    A rocky barren trail.
    Seeking out the truth,
    A task I cannot fail.

    Seeking out the truth
    And trav’ling from place to place.
    I’ve been to many villages
    But no one remembers my face.

    I’ve been to many villages
    To talk with all the town,
    I leave on the North Road,
    Just before sundown.

    I leave on the North Road,
    The wind my only friend,
    This road goes on forever,
    Indeed it never ends.

    This road goes on forever,
    Through day and stormy night.
    I’ve faced the shadows,
    But always I bring light.

    I’ve faced the shadows,
    And always won
    The light of truth
    Is like that of the sun.

    The light of truth
    Always there,
    Over those mountains,
    In green valley fair.

    Over those mountains,
    Runs a flowing creek,
    I will go there
    It is the source I seek.

    I will go there
    To find out who I am,
    The truth will tell me
    The the answer to life’s exam

    The truth will tell me
    And I’ll know what to do.
    I am a lost man wandering
    Who are you?
     
  2. Radagast

    Radagast Art House Member

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    I enjoyed this work, its as usual, pretty darn good. :)

    Only line that seems to stick out at me is:
    IMO, it doesn't seem to fit into the poems context/theme. This is of course my personal opinion, and only through critique would I point it out. But other than that, it flows smoothly, and the style reminds me of Blind Guardian, which is definately a plus!:D