This Emptiness

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Zidane, Nov 8, 2004.

  1. Zidane

    Zidane Master Thief

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    Nothing can compare to the emptiness inside,
    This black void devouring my heart,
    The razor glints at me in the bathroom mirror,
    God I'm worthless,
    It's bitter sweet seduction speaks to my pain,
    It tells me it can end my suffering,
    With two sweet kisses to my veins,
    Why do my wrists look so pretty when ther bleeding?
    There's nothing I can do to ease this pain,
    The fire speaks to my agony,
    Its cleansing burn whispers in my ear,
    It says it can ease my anguish,
    These matches look so friendly in my hand,
    It would be so easy to end all this torment,
    Watch it wash down the drain,
    Watch it disappear into smoke,
    Why does my body look so pretty when it's burning?
    I'm nothing just a worthless soul,
    Cast aside with no thought to my well being,
    Thrown into an ocean of self loathing and mutilation,
    It's easy to say get over it when you have no idea what I'm going through,
    Don't tell me to see the lighter side of things,
    You have no f*&^ing idea what hell this is,
    It's awfully hard to see the light,
    Through all this darkness.
     
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  2. PenguinofDeath

    PenguinofDeath The name says it all.

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    I loved this ^-^ It really touched me, for reasons I won't go into. Great, great job ^-^
     
  3. Zidane

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    thx very much!
     
  4. Celestial Wanderer

    Celestial Wanderer searching for peace...

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    Wow ,that was impressive! I like it. It touched my heart too.
     
  5. Zidane

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    you guys really think so?Thanks really it means alot.
     
  6. Celestial Wanderer

    Celestial Wanderer searching for peace...

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    Dun mind me asking, how did you wirte so well? Do you read a lot poems?

    These matches look so friendly in my hand,
    It would be so easy to end all this torment,
    Watch it wash down the drain,
    Watch it disappear into smoke,

    *** heart beats and sinks*** ( Cries of "AWWW" can be heard)

    Perhaps they were wrong when they say that poetry is a gift. I could write poems like yours, just two years ago. That was whn I loved literature, and poems. Now, i have no time to read anything, and i lost touch of poetry ever sice. Write more Zidane!! I wanna learn too!

    Go Zidane!!
     
  7. Zidane

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    Thanks it really means alot,really it does.And no I really don't read a lot of poems it's gonna sound weird but it's kinda the way my mind works.I can't really put it into words which is weird....anyways I'll do my best to write more and even better poetry for you and everybody else.
     
  8. Celestial Wanderer

    Celestial Wanderer searching for peace...

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    hahahaha..ur cute!!..Yeah, inspiration of feeling drawn..i get u. Usually the best poetry comes out when u feel the emotions in the poetry. Yeah,<< recalling an awful memory>>.......when i has this miserable crush on a girl last year, I wrote a number of love poems ( yuck), and showed in to my friends. Now that ilook at them, the poems were nice..its just dat...it hurts..<<what am i saying?>> ...way to go zidane!!
     
  9. Zidane

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    Love poems aren't all bad I mean I've done a number of them myself.Most would call them morbid but they can burn for all I care.I know things can hurt,more then I wish I knew,but with those emotions I can write the most beautiful or depressing poetry.Just let the emotion flow from you hands.Sometimes I don't know what I'm writing till I get done,just go with it.(And thanks again!!)
     
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  10. Princess Celebmirril

    Princess Celebmirril PRINCESS

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    Your poems make me kinda sad
     
  11. Zidane

    Zidane Master Thief

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    Me too....hmm go figure.I can't help it though for what it's worth I'm sorry I guess.
     
  12. Xaltar

    Xaltar Faen Curunír

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    The best poetry prevokes an emotional response, be it dark or happy. Well done, you have a very descriptive imagination and you would probably do well in a rock band ;) (lyrics)

    Can you sing?
     
  13. Zidane

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    I am in a band actually well you can't call it a band but I'm wranglin g some new members as we speak. I do bass and vocals,beleive it or not though I have a hard time wrighting song lyrics i don't know why but I'm getting better.Yes I can sing.
     
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    Squall Leonhart Wielder of the Gunblade

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    You are in a band? This is news to me! I liked your poem though, you have inspired me to work on some of my own.
     
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    Xaltar Faen Curunír

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    Cool, I am in a band to and strange as it may be I also play bass and do vocals LOL. What sort of music do you play? (it better be rock ;) )
     
  16. Zidane

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    Metal mostly,some rock speed metal doom metal etc etc.A.K.A. the good stuff.
     
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  17. AcrobaticHippo

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    Just came across this poem...I feel this is one of the best poems you've ever written, and that's alot, considering your flair for poetry. Excellent :)
     
  18. Zidane

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    Yeah thi was a while ago but it's never to late.I feel it's on of my better poems as well and I'l really glad you think so.