The fallen Steed.

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Hawkbat, Jan 5, 2004.

  1. Hawkbat

    Hawkbat Master of Doom

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    Through rough Terrain and slope too steep.
    Through Caves too dark and waters deep.
    You've safely bourne me through it all.
    Winter Summer Spring or Fall.

    Angry Wars without a care.
    You brought me home as if not there.
    From Charging foes without delay
    My command you did obey.

    And then at last we were surround.
    we bravely charge with trumpet sound.
    The wall is broke we Charge through free.
    A wound you take instead of me.

    You charge to fast the wound to deep.
    you fall Exhausted at my feet.
    You ran much farther then you could.
    you take me safe into the wood.

    You fall to sleep your last fight fought.
    and once again safe home I'm brought.

    This was a poem I had made For a Rohan man to his Fallen Steed.
    Lord_Hawkbat
     
  2. Radagast

    Radagast Art House Member

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    Not to bad. It has potential for being longer though. I really think if added a bit more to it, it could definately inhance the overall poem more :)