The Death Knight

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Adina, May 4, 2005.

  1. Adina

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    Ok, well I needed to create a mediocre poem to submit to tafe with my folio, so I whipped this up.

    Story of a Death Knight

    Over the hills and through the fields,
    He comes to you at night.
    Beware, sweet child, beware,
    He brings with him his glory and might.

    From the clearing and into view,
    He is a ghastly sight.
    Beware, sweet child, beware,
    Hither, comes the blackest Knight.

    On through the pass he comes further still,
    His eyes are set on you.
    Beware, sweet child, beware,
    His soul is gone, his heart’s gone too.

    By the lake, and past the fires,
    So swiftly he does ride.
    Beware, sweet child, beware,
    His eyes see all, none can hide.

    He smells your fear and tastes your blood
    Closer, closer still he comes
    Beware, sweet child, beware,
    Can you hear his death song as he hums?

    He is so close now, almost upon you,
    You must flee this wretched place.
    Beware, sweet child, beware,
    Can you see his smile upon his face?

    His reach is long and deliberate,
    His strength immense, you are his to keep.
    Farewell, sweet child, farewell,
    For you, none shall weep.
     
  2. Zidane

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    Very well done Adina,bravo.
     
  3. Liadan

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    You lied. You said that your poems sucked. :)
     
  4. Adina

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    Hahah it does. I purposefully tried to make it less than good so that the tafe will think that I'm worth taking in because I need to learn a lot.
     
  5. Zidane

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    Well regardless I think it's very well done so :p.
     
  6. Adina

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    Thanks Zidane heehhehe
    So where's your next one?
     
  7. Xaltar

    Xaltar Faen Curunír

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    Not bad, I like the form :D
     
  8. Adina

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    Ta Xaltar. Love the banner by the way :)
     
  9. Zidane

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    My next one is in the shapless black nothing of my mind waiting for the breath of life to be breathed into it's fragile frame to become a splendid thing of words an emotion.In short I'm getting there but you can't rush genius lol.
     
  10. AcrobaticHippo

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    Very nice! :)
     
  11. Radagast

    Radagast Art House Member

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    Very nice ballad. Whether on purpose or not, you employed many of the key aspects characterizing the Medieval ballad. :)
     
  12. Adina

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    Well thanks Rad :D
     
  13. LadyoftheGoldenWood

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    ary nice work adina! I loed it!!