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  1. Sabbz

    Sabbz pooky

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    I wrote this several months ago;

    I then rewrote it about 2 weeks later, in this:

    what do you think of both/either?
     
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    Sabbz pooky

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    27 views and nobody commented? I'm hurt :(
     
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    Elvenwriter Mmmm, Spam

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    -nods- it's good. why did you kill yuan, though? ;) ;)
     
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    yay, a reply! \o/

    He was killed as a sign of defiance against the Northern States Executive by the rebellion. He was in charge of that area and that area is the rebellions first objective; they want to liberate it. So, he died. He was a prat anyway :p
     
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    Elvenwriter Mmmm, Spam

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    ummm... do you realize the connection to our own TFF member and your story? ;) that's what i meant :D
     
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    I didn't, but I do now. :p
     
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    That's all I have of that, wrote it in about 15min or something. So I don't have anything beyond that synopsis lol - I am great @ writing synopsis but I suck at turning them into full novels :( .. but, I shall prevail ... eventually >.<
     
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    Jorick Well-Known Member

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    Hah, I was one of those views with no response, sorry... It was one of those things where I looked at it, decided to read it later, but never got around to it. Did so now though!

    It sounds cool. If I read that synopsis on the back of a book, I'd probably buy it. The only sticking point in my mind is the title of "Seeker." That's been used by two different well-known book series (Harry Potter and Sword of Truth), among however many others have done so, so I would highly suggest rethinking that title. But overall, cool stuff.
     
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    Yeah I was never a big fan of the "seeker" title either.

    thanks :)
     
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    I personally liked what I saw but I need more to make a real judgement call, a little lost in who is what and where. Need more writing.
     
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    Dragn9 Sorcerer Supreme

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    I found it slightly intriging, I think you did a good job on it but like Damiynn said, need more to completely grasp the concept. But a good start nonetheless.