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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by I. R. Shogun, Oct 16, 2008.

  1. I. R. Shogun

    I. R. Shogun Midnight Demon

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    The following isn't one of my best for the detail, but I'm pretty proud of the dialog, it's the first time I ever got the words of any character to be as dramatic as I wanted them to be, and that was what I really wanted from this. So I hope you all enjoy it as much as you can enjoy a story of a blackened soul claiming revenge upon people who committed no crime other than falling in love
     
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    Well, I gotta say, that was pretty intense. Very well written, and I can see what you meant by the dialogue being dramatic, one could basically visualize Vaz standing there fuming with rage before the couple. And I especially liked how you wrote the ending, it was a fitting end to the story.