Reflections

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by imagine99, Jul 9, 2005.

  1. imagine99

    imagine99 Fia, the kind fencer

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    Low self esteem.. blah..

    Reflections
    I look in the mirror,
    And despise what I see,
    I wish I could be,
    Almost anyone but me

    When I go to school,
    I'm ashamed to show my face,
    And my personality,
    Brings my self-esteem disgrace

    I look back on all the bad things,
    that I've said and done,
    And all the games that I've played,
    That I have never won

    I look into my soul,
    And I get lost among the dark,
    Well on the outside, words are ripping,
    At me like a shark

    I see clearly now,
    The hell that is my life,
    I am ever tortured,
    My back is strewn with knives

    I look into a pond,
    My reflection looks at me,
    I ripple the calm surface,
    Pretend that I'm not real

    People say I'm crazy,
    And, now I know I am,
    Because my outer happiness,
    Is nothing but a sham
     
  2. The Empress

    The Empress Solitude and Strength...

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    Wow, as I read this for the third time, all of a sudden I was trasnsported back to 8th grade...that is exactly what I went through in my junior and senior years of high school! It shows the pain and the near degredation of the after effects of others views of yourself. Well done!
     
  3. imagine99

    imagine99 Fia, the kind fencer

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    Thanks! Glad that you liked it!
     
  4. Rosgwak

    Rosgwak The Masked Warrior

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    Man, I luved that poem. Empress is right, it really captures the way you feel after others in high-school tear you down constantly, and what you end up thinking of yourself because of that. Really excellent.
     
  5. imagine99

    imagine99 Fia, the kind fencer

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    Aww... thax so much! I don't think it's that gret, personally, but..
    *shrug*

    If you say so...
     
  6. Akkarin

    Akkarin Black High Lord

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    Pretty well written. I'm no professional but I do believe it was really good.
     
  7. Ellemorpheus

    Ellemorpheus Owner of Your Soul

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    I loved it. I think I went through that pretty horribly throughout middle school and my Freshman and Sophomore years of High School. I love how you've kept the character isolated, you don't bring in other people into it. And it's exactly how you feel, alone. The mirror image helps to keep this, because the only person you trust to give you honest opinions is yourself, and when even you think you are terrible, then it's all the worse.
     
  8. Via_Amarth

    Via_Amarth Wicked Me

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    I think you did very well, fav schizo ^^ I liked the last three parts the best, so dark and evil.
     
  9. Isaac29GT

    Isaac29GT Spawn of Skyanide

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    Very good! You are quite talented
     
  10. imagine99

    imagine99 Fia, the kind fencer

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    Thank you all! Very much :) I appreciate it.
     
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    Adina <img src=http://www.thefantasyforum.com/images/nub

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    Good Job!!
     
  12. imagine99

    imagine99 Fia, the kind fencer

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    Thank you ^_^