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Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by olivia_the_lamb, Jul 30, 2008.

  1. olivia_the_lamb

    olivia_the_lamb Moderator Staff Member

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    i am
    simply
    cynically optimistic
    pessimistically real
    painfully honest
    asking to be left
    alone
    .
     
  2. Kakashi

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    Another good poem!

    Keep up the good work.
     
  3. olivia_the_lamb

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    really? i thought it was shite lol
     
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    no, its good!

    Its short, but its sort of cryptic and coolness.
     
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    The rhythm you've used for this is interesting. Is it coincidence that it goes 2, 2, 7, 7, 5, 5, 2? Or did you use a structure?
     
  7. olivia_the_lamb

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    I don't use structure
     
  8. Kakashi

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    Structure is for squares and Amish.
     
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    That'll be coincidence then.

    ~I apologise for taking an interest.. ¬_¬
     
  11. olivia_the_lamb

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    lol no I was jk mostly :)

    I just really don't ever use structure, and least not on purpose
     
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    Yeah, I was kidding except for the part about the Amish.