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Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Kaltrina, Feb 24, 2009.

  1. Kaltrina

    Kaltrina New Member

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    no one knows my secrets
    but the one who holds my heart
    no one knows my thoughts
    but the one who reads my mind
    no one knows my body
    but the one who touches me deep
    no one knows my soul
    but the one who is in control
    no one knows my fears
    but the one who pushes my limits
    no one knows my past
    but the one who wants my future
    no one sees my tears
    but the one who feels my pain
    no one knows my joy
    but the one who shares my hurt
    no one knows my anger
    but the one who recognizes my despair
    no one knows my heart
    but the one who follows the rhythm
    no one knows all my faces
    and no one hears all my cries ...
     
  2. anonymous

    anonymous the king

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    cool poem
    no one , except God ? cause bible says he knows everything :p ( no offense meant)
     
  3. Kaltrina

    Kaltrina New Member

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    i dont write by bible..i dont include religion in my writings..and plus my religion doesnt have a bible..:D
    No one except the person who maybe will be the one for me..
    thnx for your comment.
     
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    have u thought about publish them?
     
  5. Kaltrina

    Kaltrina New Member

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    not really..i didnt know that they are so good to be published
     
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    i write my self :p in mind :p to lazy to write on pc or paper :p
    -theyre ok - i am not expert u know :p
     
  7. Kaltrina

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    haha .. okay thanks :p
     
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    but try.. it dosent costs :D
     
  9. Kaltrina

    Kaltrina New Member

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    ok maybe i will :)
     
  10. The peoples champion

    The peoples champion The peoples champion

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    This is really good too. I like how you alternate between the "But" and the "no's" in the story. A very deep one indeed, nicely done :).


     
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    ohh thanks a lot ..again from you ..as i can see only you and anonymous like my poems..but still im glad that someone does.:D
    kisses
     
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    The peoples champion The peoples champion

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    LOL, true but your work is good and as long as you enjoy the finished product it should not matter if other people dont like it :ufo:.
     
  13. Jingojolene

    Jingojolene Wayfarer, heartlander

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    Very nice poem ^.^ it's touching :)
     
  14. Kally

    Kally Driving my own destiny.

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    Thats really good! You should try and get them published!! That poem sound like it was written from your own experiences. I'm not asking what they were, It just seems that way..

    But seriously, thats a really good one!