Masque: Of Heroes and Hellions

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    Started off a bit cliche, but really turned out nicely. Really enjoyed it, IR, keep up with this one. ^_^
     
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    What can I say, I enjoy cliches, so there'll be a few that pop up all over the place in this one, although the overall story is going to be somewhat unique
     
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    Awesome, a very interesting read. I really like the writing style. The whole concept is appealing. Especially this villain's "gimmick"...lol...

    I gotta say that although some of the villains from your other stories had some cool "speeches" this Gimmick dude has got a real flair for words...lol...and he ain't to shabby in the ass kicking department either.

    Really looking forward to the next update...but I believe there are some other fan fictions to occupy my time with until then...:D
     
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    I felt I had to change the writing style I usually used once I got used to using the 'noir' method. I love the first person narration because it allows to explore more of the character without it sounding forced, which I wanted to do since normally characters in my story seem kind of one-dimensional, and I really wanted to give all of these people lives of their own. And having the two chains of events running along side each other makes the transitions between the plot a lot easier and more fluid I think.

    Gimmick is probably one of the best characters I've ever made for anything too. Originally he was going to be a combination of a bunch of Batman villains, but I decided I wanted to give him his own identity when that got too complicated. What he's become, and more importantly is going to become, is a total package type of deal, and he's going to be a lot of fun to write. As for his speeches, I give full credit for his manner of speech to V from V for Vendetta, reading that really pushed me to make a more articulate figure since the only other time I made a villain in that type of vein was in Star Crossed
     
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    Yeah I gotta say that the whole "noir" method works well. It makes it more captivating and the transitions are very fluid. Even though you've written it were it goes back and forth between characters as well as between times, it still continues to make sense and is not confusing in the least.

    And I can see how Gimmick is inspired by V...V kicks ass...that 's probably why I automatically was drawn to Gimmick. You've written him with this presence that demands some respect and when he speaks the reader gives him their full attention (if that makes sense) and that makes him a cool character. You've done a fine job on that character so far, looking forward to his development in the story.
     
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    It's going to be a lot of fun to develop his character through out, as well as fleshing out the storylines I've set for everyone else so far, and the handfull of characters I still have to bring into the story. And I'm glad I set it up the way I did, it'll allow me to jump between the main points of the "three months ago" timeline as new important things come up in the present
     
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    I'll catch up on these when I can focus more...
     
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    Well there'll be another chapter up tonight probably, nothing tomorrow, and we'll just see how Thursday and Friday play out...
     
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    It's good to finally meet this Nite-Stalker character. He definately has a different mind set than the others but he seems like an interesting character. Nice idea having NS be a vigilante as well, but not on the others team.

    I gotta say that having the characters hint at what happened in the Gimmick vs Vigilante battle makes it extremely suspenseful, it leaves the reader wondering wtf happened? and it's a real attention grabber, it entices people to continue reading to learn of the event. Good update Shogun.
     
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    I've been thinking about that dynamic forever, I'm glad to finally have a chance to use it.

    And the last battle will be big, everything a superhero fight should be, I can't wait to take care of it
     
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    this story is on a minimum one week hiatus until I get all of my schedule squared away, thank you for your patience
     
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    Ah, good to see an update.

    Karen has got some reasonable questions especially because of what seems to have happened previously, which of course will be revealed in due time. But, it seems as though she may still be "on the fence" with her relationship with Rob. I liked how Karen was thinking about what happened but not going too much into detail about it, giving the reader tid bits about her encounter with Gimmick.

    ^That definately deserves a Dun, Dun, Dun!...lol

    Your writings have clearly got a lot more depth and character development, and the way you present it really compliments the storyline.
     
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    Yeah, the final battle is going to be hella fun to write, although by now you can probably get a rough idea of what'll happen
     
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