Learning to Forget

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Lady_of_Shalott, Aug 28, 2004.

  1. Lady_of_Shalott

    Lady_of_Shalott Weaving the Magic Web

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    Ok, this is a pretty poor attempt at poetry, so please criticize me.

    Learning to Forget

    I am learning to forget
    To live without regret
    No more sleepless nights
    When I turn out the lights

    Time fades all things
    I spread again my wings
    Now I can dream
    My soul no longer screams

    Again I build castles in the air
    As I sit with the wind blowing through my hair
    Clouds have passed away
    There is sunshine this day

    I sit and brood no more
    There are better things the day is for
    For life again my heart yearns
    Can now genius burn?

    The world is no longer bleak
    I am no longer weak
    Strong with the hope of days new
    Like the sun shining on the dew

    I have learned to forget
    Good-bye regret
    I do no fear the night
    And look evermore toward the light
     
  2. Radagast

    Radagast Art House Member

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    I like it, and I can't see anything major to critique. It almost feels as though I'm reading lyrics to a song, you should consider composing some music to it ;).

    But good job :)
     
  3. Lady_of_Shalott

    Lady_of_Shalott Weaving the Magic Web

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    Thanks Radagast. That is highly encouraging.
     
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    Radagast Art House Member

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    I am always glad to see more posters in the Writing forums :). Hopefully someday maybe TFF will get a writing house/guild up and running.
     
  5. LadyoftheGoldenWood

    LadyoftheGoldenWood Well-Known Member

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    i like it LoS and he is right it would make a vary good song!