Last Words

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Ender-Zero, Aug 13, 2004.

  1. Ender-Zero

    Ender-Zero Ruff Mercenary

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    As I sit, it sweeps...
    When I stand, it creeps...
    Where I am, I do not know...
    What it is I am, I fear to show...

    Last remains of a fallen death...
    The words escape on my last breath...
    Those words reach out to me...
    At last I finaly see...

    Silence has come upon us all...
    Don't be afraid we all shall fall...
    Life slowly drains through us, out of our breath....
    That rouge life continues to drain, leading to our final death...

    Rubbish I speak and such a twisted sound...
    My blackened sould shall nay be found...
    Deseased mind of chaos and pure hatred....
    What you become I must not dread....

    These are the final words spoken upon my death...
     
  2. Radagast

    Radagast Art House Member

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    Nice. I like the dark feel to it.:D If anything though, I definately feel you should add more to the length, it feels incomplete. But good job :)*thumbs up*
     
  3. Ender-Zero

    Ender-Zero Ruff Mercenary

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    Cool thanks, I think I will add more just at the time I couldn't think of more, I'll post more to it later when it's more like night time, that way I can get the dark feel.
     
  4. DarkElv22-JJ

    DarkElv22-JJ Your opponent

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    good job, never knew you had a soft side to ya. i cant wright poetry even if my life depended on it......thats why my gf's write ME poetry :p
     
  5. Ender-Zero

    Ender-Zero Ruff Mercenary

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    Yeah but this isn't the type of poetry you would read to a girl Darky.
     
  6. Mánaskin

    Mánaskin Ruler of the Night

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    its really nice
     
  7. LadyoftheGoldenWood

    LadyoftheGoldenWood Well-Known Member

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    it has a vary dark felling that creeps me out!

    I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!