Kayla, Chapter 1 --Lent

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  1. anitacondoin

    anitacondoin New Member

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    I have attached my chapter to this message, coz perhaps it easier to read in Word? And I can't copy it to these pages, as I only have the compatibilty mode-copy left on my laptop... :) Doh!!

    I welcome all comments and feedback, good and bad, as you lot are my only chance to get feedback from true fantasy fans!

    Don't expect any wizardry in this chapter as it is meant to be the beginning/ first chapter of a longer piece/novel, an introduction of characters-- what I need to know is whether it's worth continuing, whether you would want to read more (or not!) and why!

    Thanks peeps!!
    x Helena

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    I downloaded it but have to go to work now :( But I will read and give you some feedback over the weekend :)
     
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    Jet I Improvised

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    Downloaded and reading it asap.
     
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    Well I really enjoyed it. I think you have a good introduction to the characters with a nice overlay of humour on it. Overall I think you have an interesting start here :). Only one or two sentences that didn't quite flow :)

    I give you a sparkly alien: :ufo: