Is Love Real?

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by waterchiq713, Nov 4, 2006.

  1. waterchiq713

    waterchiq713 New Member

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    Well the title speaks for itself, I swear I could make this one so long, that is why I don't like it, feels so incomplete, but yeah, sorry about that if you feel it to. Any feedback that would be great. I don't like it, kind of. But feedback of any kind would be great, like telling me how you would feel if your ex bf/gf gave it to you, and you still loved them.

    November 2nd
    Is Love Real?

    Laying in my bed at night,
    Tears wanting to come, but I fight.
    He is so completely different now,
    I hate it! How could I have admired him, wow.
    I still love him,
    But what is there to love again?
    Is love real?
    He proved love was the key, got on his knee.
    Yet he was also the one to break it,
    Not wanting to try again, I hate it.
    I gave him a second chance, stupid, …you may think.
    I honestly don’t, it was the best time in my life * wink *
    He was my hero, and sometimes still is.
    Remembering him telling me about our grandikids.
    Would you find that creepy?
    I didn’t and it felt real, but now I feel so sheepishly.
    I want to hold on,
    Because he once did & wished for a life live long.
    I don’t know what to do,
    I tried everything, but still stuck in poop.
    He didn’t even care, even for something small,
    Like my grandpa died, didn’t budge at all.
    I showed him how much I love/d him.
    I feel as if I got kicked in the shin,
    Pain is all I feel,
    And I know he caused it, just don’t wanna know it’s real.
    He showed me what love was,
    And ended it with just, …cuz.
    It’s been 8 months since that day,
    And I still think of him daily, everyday I pay.
    Especially at night,
    Tossing and turning in a room with no light,
    Living a nightmare.
    I think back in such detail, I get such a scare.
    Wanting to wait,
    But he doesn’t even wanna be friends, such a cheapskate.
    Why must I cry?
    Over a guy who I felt always lied.
    Why should I wait?
    For what? Him? Is it too late?
    He’s being forgotten, and hurt me so bad.
    Why can I not hate him? To be mad?
    Is it love?
     
  2. bloodfiredeath

    bloodfiredeath Die by the Sword

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    Heres the poem I would send him.

    Twisted, Blackened, hard and dark,
    A heart by another name.
    Torn out by you and trampled underfoot,
    In what is called loves pathetic game.

    All your words naught but lies,
    All you gave me was lifes bitter scorn.
    No hope for the future, your parting gift.
    Leaving me empty, broken and torn.

    Now I am left to my dark thoughts
    Passing time betwixt love and hate.
    Wondering about how slow to make it,
    As I plan your ultimate final fate.

    Bit crap I made it up as I went!
     
  3. Wing Rider

    Wing Rider Psychotic Cybernetica

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    I can't help thinking: what a contrast :p
    Both poems really good, waterchiq's one is how you were hurt and bloodfiredeath's one is how you will get your revenge :D
    I'd do one too but my lesson's coming up soon. And what happened to you, waterchiq?
     
  4. lanaia74

    lanaia74 New Member

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    Totally AWESOME!
     
  5. waterchiq713

    waterchiq713 New Member

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    well It's a very good poem, but I don't hate him at all. That's just the thing.
     
  6. waterchiq713

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    Awww thank you so much