I die a little each day.

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  1. Zidane

    Zidane Master Thief

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    I can't beleive how far from my life I've strayed,
    Distant and incoherant,it's just a blur,
    It's all so strange now,
    Everything I used to know, I don't know anymore,
    Amplyfing my confusion seven fold,
    Life seems so out of reach,
    I can't get a hold no matter how I try,
    Today a piece of me changed,
    Today a piece of me died,
    Little by little I'm becoming a different person,
    Each heart beat a little more slips away,
    Each breath another part claimed by the darkness,
    A heart with missing pieces is dieing in my chest,
    Crying in it's pain,
    Having nothing left to give,
    Do I continue or do I die?
    Alas, I shall move on with it all,
    Yet I can't help but wonder:Will it always be this way?
     
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  2. gohekan

    gohekan The Fighters Guide House Member

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    you may be the greatest poet Ive ever seen.Yoiu sould make a book.I know I would buy it.P.S. I realy hope that isnt reflecting you.I would cry. :(
     
  3. Zidane

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    It does reflect me that's how I write these poems it's actual feelings.Don't cry though it's okay.I have a hard time putting all my emotions into words but I'm getting better.Thanks too!
     
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    Very, very well written poetry. I could only dream of writing as well as you can. and to think you write on the spot is just remarkable. congratulations, that is a skill.
     
  5. Zidane

    Zidane Master Thief

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    Thanks man it really means alot.
     
  6. Xaltar

    Xaltar Faen Curunír

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    Nice, I have always liked dark poetry. Keep it comming ;)
     
  7. Zidane

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    Can,will, and always will be writing dark and light poetry don't worry.Thanks too.
     
  8. Thorin

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    Nice. I wrote a few things like that, nothing compares to yours though... mine were just dark... hatred of most humanity... etc. I was quite bored in Writerscraft class. Im not a fan of studing poetry... it should just be read... maybe a bit of meaning stuff... but who really cares about what poetic devices it has.

    Great poem. Put together a collection and try to publish it somewhere. Its possible!
     
  9. Zidane

    Zidane Master Thief

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    I would publish them but I don't think anybody would want to.Thanks for the vote of confidence.Studying poetry granted I practically NEVER do it,it still can be worth your time.Good point though who does care about the poetic devices as long as you like it.
     
  10. Squall Leonhart

    Squall Leonhart Wielder of the Gunblade

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    Hey!!! It is an acrostic!!! The first letter of each line spells out the title, "I Die A Little Each Day"!!!! Very creative!!! Only men of great emotion can write with such eloquency, only the ones who have felt a woman's gunshot through the heart.
     
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    I didn't even notice, COOL. Well done once again, it takes skill to do that and not have a crappy poem. Good work! :D
     
  12. Zidane

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    Thanks guys I was wondering who would notice that first.Very astute Squall I wonder hoe you found out "wink,wink".Yes they sound painful because I write out of emotion and I have ALOT of pain beleive me.
     
  13. Khamul

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    Good images, was a little confused by the grammar in the two lines :

    Today a piece of my changed,
    Today a piece of my died,


    Was that alluding to something earlier or just a typo?

    Also, are you parting from life in general or vice versa?

    Very well written poem, impressed by your thoughts. :) Keep it up
     
  14. Zidane

    Zidane Master Thief

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    Alluding,typo what are you talking about?I meant what I wrote,and to answer your question a little of both.Thanks too.
     
  15. Khamul

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    Just using the word "my." What does "my" represent?
     
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    Xaltar Faen Curunír

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    Typo.....
     
  17. Zidane

    Zidane Master Thief

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    Holy heck I didn't even notice that I need to do better proof reading,sorry guys and thanks for bringing that to my attention.
     
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    That was a wonderful poem, Zidane! My crappy skills can never match yours...:D
     
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    Don't say that you just need time to "mature" your skills.It took mr years to learn how to write like that so don't give up.Besides I write out of pain alot because I've been in alot of bad relationships so I"ve payed a price for these words,a very high price.Thanks a bunch too!
     
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