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Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Elvenblademaster, Nov 6, 2003.

  1. Elvenblademaster

    Elvenblademaster New Member

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    Heres one I wrote, about Gandalf, after frodo wrote the lament of Gandalf. You repeat the last line of his poem like this.

    He stood upon the bridge alone
    and fire and shadow both defied
    his staff was broken on the stone
    in khazadum his wisdom died.

    Now here is my part

    Down they fell through fathoms deep,
    Gandalf and the shadow flame,
    up they climbed the endless stair so steep
    then upon the mount he smote Durin's Bane.
    Through this deed he now had earned,
    new tilte and apparel bright,
    now longer Gandalf the grey old and learned,
    but Gandalf the shining white.


    I wrote that because after Gandalf showed back up the before part seemed incomplete.
     
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  2. ElvenArcher

    ElvenArcher New Member

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    bravo ebm!
     
  3. finrod

    finrod Born to woe.

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    you know, I am not very much into poetry but I actually like this.

    carry the poem on!
     
  4. Meteorain

    Meteorain Magical & Mystical

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    very creative....its not easy to carry on someone else's poem
     
  5. Elvenblademaster

    Elvenblademaster New Member

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    Thank you all.
     
  6. emikat

    emikat Lycanthrope

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    That was very good. :)
     
  7. dwarf tosser

    dwarf tosser "What the Deuce?"

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    how old ru EBM>?

    -dt
     
  8. Jessehk

    Jessehk The introverted

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    very good! tolkien worthy I'd say.
     
  9. Elvenblademaster

    Elvenblademaster New Member

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    Thank you Jesse!