Critique of a part of my fantasy book?

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  1. Reece56364

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    which idea?

    and how do you think of things to write about?
     
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    Druid of Lûhn The Little Lamb.

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    Your Wanderingmagus shop idea. I've taken pictures of the things said with "Grab", then turning them into a story.
     
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    Taken Pictures?
    And I've posted mine just above yours.. Love yours :D
     
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    Druid of Lûhn The Little Lamb.

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    I choose a part of the screen I want, and press OK; it takes a picture, and I put them all on a USB key, so I can write anywhere with a computer.

    Yours is great as well, just faster than mine.
     
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    ohh yeaa.. I've not had time recently.. Been too hot :p
     
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    Not bad. I like the centaur. There are a few grammar issues and I think you need to work on the way it flows a little, but I am hardly qualified to offer writing advice. Overall it's pretty good, seems like a good start
     
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    It exists also on Windows 7, though under another name.
     
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    "Snipping tool"
    I found it last night while messing around on spotify :)
     
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    You can take a picture of anything on the screen, it's quite cool - and it's copied from "Grab" on Mac...
     
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    Mac copied :p
     
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    Druid of Lûhn The Little Lamb.

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    Windows is copied from Mac; Apple made the windows on their computer screen first, showed it to Microsoft, who violated the copyright and made "Windows"
     
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    Oh.. i dunno.. never was interested really :p
    Stuff like that bores me :D
     
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    Well, I only know it 'caus I had to learn it for my first IT test.
    We then went on to Photoshop, html, next year it's flash, mathematical use of excel, ...