Critique of a part of my fantasy book?

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  1. Reece56364

    Reece56364 Guest

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    haha, nar, Im gonna have a think about it :)
     
  2. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    yeah....
    Bada$$ fighter navi doesn't make sense does it?
     
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    nar, what race does though?
    I was thinking half-ogre, but WHO THE HELL would do that with an ogre??
     
  4. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    Exactly

    Especially a non-ogre
    XD
     
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    Yes.. I just remembered one of my childhood favourites... Satyrs! Im thinking of introducing Reece as one :D
     
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    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    That would be a good race.
    If you really want a mixed race, maybe satyr and centaur?
     
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    I hate centaurs... I preferably wanted something with horns, and NORMAL legs ;) But mine are pretty hairy too, so i guess it matches :p
     
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    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    XD
    Minotaurs!
    jk
    they have crepier legs than centaurs
     
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    haha, na, ill settle on a satyr :p Whats the difference between a satyr and a faun? :s
     
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    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    No idea. I'll go look it up!
    *Google, Away*
     
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    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    Copied from yahoo:
    Satyrs are lustful creatures that are part goat. Fauns are part deer and are more peaceful, calmer beasts.
     
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    soo.. Which one has hairier legs?
     
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    They both have hairy legs, but saytrs have human feet.
     
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    Im a satyr then ;) It's settled..
     
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    :p
    Im just doing like, a fact sheet thing now, so that tomorrow (My day off college), i can plow through it :)
     
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    Thats a good idea.
    C:
     
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    :)
    Hey, your a ranger, not a nooobie now :p
     
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    Druid of Lûhn The Little Lamb.

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    Ah, a LUSTFUL creature...

    I've started copying down your idea Reece; I'm at 1597 words.