Critique of a part of my fantasy book?

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  1. Druid of Lûhn

    Druid of Lûhn The Little Lamb.

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    Nice quote.
    I like Vicente most for now, for I like proper vampires (not "twampires)
     
  2. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    I know. I'm the same. They didn't come from today, right? so why would they talk like regualr adults today?
    He's my fav too
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  3. Reece56364

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    Well, i was thinking, would it be a bit too big to merge the Lake, Mole town and the shop together as one?
    And druid, i like it, sounds professional :)
     
  4. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    I think that would be the best idea
     
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    Would it also make the finished product sound silly though?
     
  6. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    I don't think it would.
     
  7. Reece56364

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    Hm... How are we gonna go about this?
     
  8. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    I think we should wait until Druid or Magus comes back online, then start. I'm going to be in Texas on a trip starting tomorrow for a week. I don't know if i will have an internet connection, but if not, I can start typing up a part of my story.
     
  9. Reece56364

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    Yeah, I mean, about the parts... Are we all doing the same part and taknig the best bits from each? Or are we doing separate parts?
     
  10. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    I think maybe we should each write our history *Of our character* and then mash those into the first three chapters, four if magus does it, then kinda alternate chapters between us, icluding the most important stuff.
     
  11. Reece56364

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    Hm.. yeahh.. I like this... Kinda like a fantasy biography?
    and what would the important stuff need to be?
     
  12. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    hmm, maybe infiltrationsm important fights..... a plot line
    XD
     
  13. Reece56364

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    Like a background history? how they found who they were?
     
  14. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    Right, ill start it once i get a chance :)

    How long will yours be?
     
  16. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    i'll probably write four or five pages for my starting chapter.
     
  17. Reece56364

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    Geeeezzz... i gotta lot of writing to do :p
     
  18. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    you don't need to do as much for yours, but mine will take a while to explain MY rules of vampirism. ;)
     
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    Ohh yess.. well, Ill write about my history... being a na'vi...
     
  20. Azrielle1024

    Azrielle1024 Aspiring teenage author

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    XD
    thats all i can say....
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    lolrotflmas!