Critique of my fantasy novel? Hello fellow fantasy lovers! I would like to share a piece of my story with you today, and I am looking for Kindly worded tips and critique. Keep in mind i am barely a teen. Thank you. Here it is, If i get good reviews i might post a bit more of it. Name Pronunciation: Calises: Ka-lee- sis Vicente- Vi-sen-tAY Akosid- A-co-sid Boraf: Boar- uf Sheovaul: She- O-vaul (sounds like haul, but with a 'v' not an 'h') Okay: Here it is: Prologue: Vicente drew in a deep breath as the members of the Council of Crowns stared at him. “You cannot be serious about this Vicente!” Calises, the Elvin prince shouted at him. “I failed last time attempting to bring one of the outsiders here. What makes you think I could succeed this time?” The elegant robe-clad elf next to the enraged council member drew an arm around Calises’ shoulder. “Calm down, my brother. We must hear the other ideas from the council first.” “You’ll be the death of me, Akosid. I have the right to be mad. No Elvin king, brother or not, can change that.” Akosid was shocked at his brother’s transformation from the calm, shy little brother to a ball of rage that made the most talented of warriors look like puppies. “I was merely suggesting that we should bring another mortal here to try and solve this crisis. The Dark Lord, Sheovaul, has acquired one of our crowns. I suppose the elves still have their crowns, as you so frequently boast.” Vicente spat out at Calises. “Yes as a matter of fact we still have both.” More sarcasm from the mouth of Calises. “Well, you may want to hold onto those tightly, because our troops have discovered that Sheovaul is planning an attack. A bloody attack.” “I won’t trust anything a filthy bloodsucker says.” The two were broken apart as a split in the earth came zigzagging towards them, cutting the two standing rivals apart. The crack widened and divided, revealing a fiery pit. Vicente raised his hands in defeat. “I was just stating an opinion.” He whispered to himself. The centaur from across the circle withdrew his staff from the ground. “We are getting nowhere. If you two won’t stop bickering, I’ll tie you two together with vines.” The centaur said as he stomped his hooves against the grass. That comment was enough to extinguish the revulsion between them, at least for now. If there was one thing Calises hated more than the vampire, it would be being tied to a hungry version of Vicente. The two were content to just stare at each other, at the moment at least. “Now, if we could actually decide on something instead of complaining. All of those who vote we bring another mortal into our realm raise your hand.” Vicente, Akosid, centaurs and various Dryads raised their hands. “I’m sorry brother, but the only way we can solve this problem is by bringing in a mortal.” Akosid regretfully told his brother. “That is well over half of you. Now, we must choose the person to go and fetch an able mortal from the other world. Does anyone have an idea?” said the same centaur. “I have an idea, if I may.” Vicente said, a smirk pulling at the ends of his lips. “I think that Calises should go. It would be his one chance at redeeming his dignity.” Approving murmurs spread throughout the council. Please Don't use any of the parts in your own stories. I don't think any of you would, but i just have to add that. It took me forever to think up names, even though i wrote this all today. Please leave critique!