Come aboard the Vagabond.

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  1. TheMeanMachine

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    It's a story I am curently writting and putting the chapters on FictionPress as I finish them.

    Here's the link----->http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2575132/1/Come_aboard_the_Vagabond

    Well, it's a fantasy story set in a world where magic and relatively high technology coexist. It fellows a the crew of a Skyship as they travel around the world of Aura. I don't know how it's gonna end yet, since this is an experiment. But I will try my honest best to make it good.
    The only thing I can assure you is going to be in it is the theme of kicking reason to the curb.
    Other than that, I can only tell you of things that you are NOT going to come across in this story. Here's a quick list.
    -Whiny teenagers.
    -Light vs dark conflict
    -Good vs evil conflict
    -Damsel in distress
    -As litle royalty and nobility as possible
    -That whole destiny nonesense
    -SAME THING ABOUT BEING THE CHOSEN ONE (Christ I hate that one)
    -let's not forget prophecies.
    -Mastermind that has a an IMOBILE base(stronghold)
    -My religious and social views plastered all over the place

    I am trying to put some light hearted flavor in it. Meaning this is not going to be something too deep and serious.


    PBy all means, if you want to critic it, do it. I am all ears snce this is my first work.
     
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    Hey, guess what, I completely overhauled chapter 2. It's double the word count and much better then the orriginal, I think. :draught: I cheer myself.
     
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    Black Tattoo The Corruptor

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    I really anjoyed this. Very cool! And "cheers" to you! :D
     
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    You did, did you?

    Man, you don't know how much I love reading those few words. Feels really good inside when I do.If I feel like it, I might write the fourth chapter tonight! Or should I say, if I finish this geography assigment with reasonable time left?
     
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    Yup. Finished and posted an other "chapter". This one is a little different.
     
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    Black Tattoo The Corruptor

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    You're VERY welcome! :D

    And yes, as a writer myself, I DO know how it feels to recieve genuine positive feedback :D I really do enjoy reading your works and am glad I've been following this! This is so interesting! I love the world it takes me to :)