A poem nobody ever liked

Discussion in 'Fan Poetry' started by Mika Schpiljack, Feb 28, 2006.

  1. Mika Schpiljack

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    Here's a poem I wrote at the time when I reached the peak of my creativity. Sadly, I've posted it on the forum that didn't much like or care for poetry, so they just told me it's a piece of crap. Although I do know it's a piece of crap, somehow I like it anyway. Tell me what you think, and please, try to remain as polite as possible. Harsh criticism may affect my mental development.



    Master and the Protracter
    by
    Jason GSux

    Master, you are my protracter.
    Along with the woods
    and the cattle around it.

    Misty is morning,
    kings of old moaning -
    In search of the gold,
    of Leprechaun's mold.​



    :littlethi *bows*
     
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  2. Fox

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    Outstanding! :cool: :cool: :cool: :cool: :cool: :cool: :cool:


    I don't like it at all, but good job!
     
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  3. Mika Schpiljack

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    Whoa, thanks!!! :D
     
  4. Richard Rahl

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    GENIUS!!! Omg!! You rule! What a masterpiece :cool:
     
  5. Mika Schpiljack

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    You know what? With that kinda feedback I coulda write more! Maybe I could write for living, whaddayathink? Thank you guys so very much, I always assumed I was talented, but now you actually proved it!

    I'm so proud! :)
     
  6. Fox

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    Omg, here's some inspiration!

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    Meteorain Magical & Mystical

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    affect your mental development?

    Wow...maybe I shouldn't say anything, but I will....its...unique =]
     
  8. Mika Schpiljack

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    To all of me fans out there, I believe I owe the original of this poem. Fox, RR, Meteorain... This one's for you. Thank you all.



    Meštar, ti si moj šestar
    by
    Jason GSux

    Meštar, ti si moj šestar.
    Baš kao šuma
    i okolna stoka.

    Magleno jutro,
    kraljevi tužni -
    Tražit će zlato,
    vilinski kalup.​



    :littlethi :littlethi *bows again*
     
  9. Fox

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    Omg sweet Eastwood avatar. :cool:


    oh, and nice poem too...
     
  10. Mika Schpiljack

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    Whoa! It is incredible; my favourite 4 avatars on tff, all located in this thread!! :D
     
  11. Radagast

    Radagast Art House Member

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    "Misty is morning,
    kings of old moaning -"


    I wouldn't recommend ryhming with "ing", but other than that it's decent. Keeping it short is good, poetry is about simplicity.
     
  12. Mika Schpiljack

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    Rhyming? Oh damn, never noticed!