Final Deatiny (ORIGNAL VERSION REVISED)

[Xekester]

I'm revising my first story I ever wrote, Im actually having a blast rewriting all over.
I posted the orignal version a couple months earlier I think it was Aug of 2006 or something like that.
I hope you'll have fun reading this just as I did revising it.
Thank You and Happy Readings 'LOL'
This is just the beggining of my revision I will continue to post more over time.

(Criticism will be taken literally and used to correct my work and enhance my skills as a writer, credit will be given where it is due)

Final Destiny
And the Return of the ZX-Hand
Written by Brian A Washington
The Lively Introduction

Long ago, within the of the land of Shinook lived a newly proclaimed Swordsman. This lonely Swordsman did a many great things throughout Shinook, and an additional side quests which had to be carried out in other distant lands. This Swordsman name is Xekellian Willinger; though he prefers to be called Xeke for short. Xekellian’s previous quest had earned him his current fame and fortune, Xekellian’s accomplishments were quickly spread to all six corners of Shinook.
Before Xekellian became famous he lived the life as a lowly guard of his village struggling to make ends meets day in and day out, the same old routine every stinkin’ day; well that’s how Xekellian would’ve put it. Every night right after Xekellian shift was over he would sneak over the Shift Manager house just to check if he could sleep in that night on account of he didn’t have to go to work the previous day. But knowing Xeke had that gut feeling that maybe there more than this provincial life of his, he thought about running off and leaving his brother Clay, to tend to the siblings alone but he didn’t have the heart to do just that..., well not yet anyway. Much Greatness was headed for the downhearted guard, the only thing that stood in the way was time.
Xekellian went to the armory to turn in his gear like his always did after getting off of work, on the way over to his house he saw Clay bringing in his last load of corn stalks of the day; he had a small smile at the corner of mouth. Clay immediately noticed Xekellian, giving him a heads up as he tossed the corn stalks over Xekellian’s head.
“Any thing interestin’ happen at work today?” Clay asked. Xekellian looked up into the sky and shook his head, he was way too tired to speak and all he could compete with his brother high spirit was with his tired from a long hard day at work especially when your job requires fighting off monsters and wildlife constantly