harmonixer554
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harmonixer554

The Bringer Of The End Of Times... and Cookies, Male, 23, from England

harmonixer554 was last seen:
Jun 14, 2015
    1. Kakashi
      Kakashi
      alright, good night man.

      Talk to you later.
    2. Kakashi
      Kakashi
      Sorry, I've been busy ;D
    3. Kakashi
      Kakashi
      oh, sorry about that ^^

      I'll get a post up.
    4. Alchemist
      Alchemist
      For 14 you did rather well. Pay extra attention in those fields of english and you should be on your way. I wish you luck :D
    5. Alchemist
      Alchemist
      Lol, thought it was longer. Firstly, this is criticism, not an attack. You need to proofread your work, there were many spelling, sentence structure and various other grammatical errors. Not saying you need to be perfect, just work on that. Also expand your vocabulary or get a thesaurus. They help wonders, but it is always good to learn new words for yourself as well.
      I am guessing you are young, just by your writing (I hope I am not wrong lol). You have a good imagination and what seems like a passion for writing, those are two good traits if you want to write. Read, read read. Write, write, write. There are no other tips really. The more you read, the more you learn and pick up on writing styles, that way you can apply them to yours, develop your own, and improve.
      The more you write, the better you will become.
      It seems to be an interesting story, but sentence structure and other grammatical errors really hurt it. I am not an English teacher and cannot give you technical terms for what is what, I just know when I see something that is wrong.
      Another tip, would be to start with short stories instead of jumping into a novel or book. Short stories do not get as much credit as they deserve. They will help with your writing, pace, plot, etc.
      You have good potential, just keep practicing. :D
    6. Alchemist
      Alchemist
      Alright, I'll give it a look over for you. I may not get any feedback for you today, as I also am helping some other members with their writing as well. But, I will get around to it. ^_^
    7. Mem
      Mem
      no problem.
    8. Alchemist
      Alchemist
      lol, yeah. I read quite often..well not as much since uni but...yeah.
    9. Mem
      Mem
      hm,feedback? chapter two, too much alex in a sentence like: "alex stands up. alex sits"
      othet than that,looking good.
    10. Mem
      Mem
      i'll try.
    11. Mem
      Mem
      you could.
    12. ZionsRodeVos
    13. barricade
      barricade
      kk, I'll be back on in a while. need to get some sleep, nice to meet you. ^^
    14. barricade
      barricade
      hm, Korpiklaani seems really odd amongst all those other bands. lol.
    15. barricade
      barricade
      lol, perhaps. I'm pretty sure you have never heard of my main toon. lol Sehrgiftig, BE mage on Shandris.

      What are some of your favorite bands?
    16. barricade
      barricade
      lol, yes. I am a female gamer/metalhead. and no I'm not talking about Slipknot and Godsmack either.
    17. barricade
      barricade
      aww, alliance? I don't think we can speak to each other anymore. lol. :P

      My favorite class race/class combos are Blood Elf mage and Undead rogue, I do like the night elf druids better than the tauren. I think they're racials are better suited for it.
    18. barricade
      barricade
      yeah, I've been playing for about 4 years. It'll be sad if the patch screws it up as bad as I think it will. Blizzard has just gone to far to try to please everyone and has succeeded in only making the game feel more and more childish and less challenging.
    19. barricade
      barricade
      yeah, the new patch may just ruin WoW for me. The new nerfs are gonna kill mages.
    20. Mem
      Mem
      you need to change your attitude
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    Gender:
    Male
    Birthday:
    Jun 29, 1994 (Age: 23)
    Location:
    England
    Occupation:
    Musician
    Hello there! I am an average 20(nearly 21) year old guy, I study and play music for a living, If I can call it that as I am being support by my friend who works full time right now.

    I have always loved roleplaying and although I may have been terrible at it when I was younger I now have a good grasp on the English language and would therefore consider myself to be quite the writer these days.

    As far as interests go Music is my life but if I ever talk about anything else it will most probably be DoTA2 or possibly even alcohol, not much room for conversation i guess but either way I will always find something ^.^

    Anyway thank you for reading this (Don't know why you did) however if you did I guess you probably want to talk so drop us a message and ill get back to you! Cya!

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